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SteeveyW

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Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2008 5:29 am Post subject: A Good story ?

It is March 31st,2009 My name is Steve Weattie. Alot of people call me Steve Wheaties, my wife calls me Steevey Weevey. I live in the busy city of Boston. I have a job as a manager of internfal affairs at the Boston Public Library. It may sound a bit espionage saying that I handle internal afairs but I'm the head boss for all that goes on at the library. I'm the man that handles security. Someone steals a book in front of our cameras Im the man that security tells first,I'm the man that handles books coming in to this library and out and know what books should be banned from this library.I wasnt all that good in math as a kid but I deal with library funds at times. Im not the head man to handle that but I work with everyone. It's alot to handle for one man. It may seem a bit unrealistic. How can one man be handling all these things for a library? Sounds like something out of a story. I would have thought so too,but its all true. Im a busy man but I worked hard in my life to get this far to the top. As a kid I always wanted to be a librarian,I did too when I was a teenager,I just became something more at the end. It's alot of responsibilty but I'm an organized man. I have enough time to be here at this library everyday except for Sundays and be home by 6 or 7 to spend the night with my wife. Today is March 31st,2009. It is 5:29 A.m. Im laying down next to my sweet wife _____. She's sleeping peacefully and I feel like everything is right in the world with me. She lays there so sweet. Her bosom rising and falling with every breath,her beautiful face in peace,every aspect of her is beautiful. With her next to me I feel like I can do anything. As usual she sleeps with her pink fluffy pillow,her pink fluffy blanket,in her pink pajamas. If I didnt know by now that her favorite color in the world is pink, I would have to be a very stupid person.It's funny to be sleeping with a pink blanket,a pink pillow underneath my head as well. At least I dont wear the pink pajamas. I have still some man dignity on me. For her though, I would walk down the street in pink. I would be laughed at but it would be worth it to make her happy. My colors for me have always been black and yellow. I cant seem to know why I like both. I cant just like black or just like yellow. I only like these colors in a combination. Their too distinct colors but I seem to enjoy both colors as well as pink which I began after I met ____. It is 5:45 A.m now and that means I should take a shower now. I get out of our king sized Serta Bed, thats one good bed never had a bad nights sleep with that bed, and walk to the bathroom to take a shower.It feels nice under my feet to walk on the pink mats in the bathroom. Sigh. Well... I do this everyday and I wouldnt change it for the world. I always feel content with my life. I mention pink so much and I tolerate my wifes adoreness with pink. Its a fine color just as red or blue would be ,but I dont consider myself to be less a man to like the color. Its funny that I always assure myself that everyday when I reach the bathroom. It's just a funny habit I have. I dont think its a bad habit at all. It keeps my life in balance doing almost the same thing everyday. I say almost since I never know what me and my wife will do. Shes very engergetic and outgoing so one minute we could be eating and next me and her could be throwing water at each other for fun. I also never know what will ever happen at work. THeres always something that could happen at work...a book stolen, a disturbed patron making a scene in the library entrance, you just never know. It is 6:03 A.m and I have finished taking a shower. Im dressed in one of my best suits since today I know I have a meeting with a few members of the Children Donation FUnd. I will be making sure that the libray has the theme of children and caring for needful children. Ill prob prospose the idea of putting childrens faces around the library and donation boxes near the childrens room,near entrances and such. It shouldnt be a bad day. Its Tuesday and Tuesdays are the days where usually activity and such is very slow. No problem for me though..if work is slow then at least Ill have my house to come home to with ____. It is 6:25 A.m and Im eating breakfast at my polished table with pink flower designs. Im eating Cocoa Puffs from a pink bowl with a pink flower spoon. Im reading yesterdays Boston Globe since the newspaper doesnt come to our house till 7 o clock. I usually am behind the news by one day but thats ok for me since I read the news just to know current events or to bring up some such thing I read in the newspaper in a meeting like "Why are we all acting like the Dubois family that fought over their dog for ? Lets just be the state of Massachusetts and get rid of the Dubois family?" It is 6:45 A.m. Ive cleaned my cereal bowl ,put away the cocoa puffs and am heading upstairs to kiss ____ goodbye. I would be a fool to try to wake her up since she never can wake up early. If I tried to wake her up with me in the morning she would be cranky the whole day. Well,she'll be waking up soon since she may want to go to the mall later. As she told me there will be a new purse out on sale today that will have a built in cell phone holder,a mini tv screen to watch the latest soap operas and it even has satellite so you can watch any nationality of soap operas wheter it be Japanese or Russian or even Arab. Hmm...I also think this new purse will be pink and have an automated cell phone operator meaning I think if you click some certain button the purse it can put your phone on to answer a call. Shes always saying how sometimes I call her and she can never pick up the phone because its in her purse and she has to try to find the phone in her purse and by that time she misses the call. So..maybe this will be a good purse for her. "____ Im leaving for work ok? I left you some goodies on the kitchen table and a surprise in your make -up kit. ON the kitchen table I have for her a pumpkin pie for her that I bought last night . In the make -up kit ive left for her 200 $. Of course shes not a spend thrift we have to do some food shopping, so I dont expect her to use all that money for the purse. Well I hope so. "hhmmm..ok my steevey weevy Ill see you later then." I moved for the usual good morning kiss . I kissed her on her lips. Most of the time that would wake her up but today I could see she was a bit tired so I gave her a not too long kiss on the lips and one on her forehead and cheek. I Then I put my hand threw her hair and said Ill see you later _________""Mhmm k Steevey I love you." I love you so much more _____ ,I told her. It is 7:21 A.M. I kissed my wife goodbye earlier. I walked out of the house,into the garage, entered my black Beemer that was next to my wifes Beemer, a pink convertible. My beemer was the usual sedan. It had the usual leather seats,GPS system, pink dice in the mirror one pink one actually and the other one black,heating on the seats,and a kickin stereo system. Yeah kickin..well for listening to music it always makes me feel cool and young. It is 7:27 A.M. and I m close to the library. Theres plenty of traffic at this time. I just have to drive down this street,pass Boston Common,take a right at Lowe's Theater and just head straight down and I'll be there. As of now Im close to nearing Lowe's Theater. Too many s toplights and people passing. So many commuters are clogging up this street. Every damn minute Im stopping for them! It's just annoying that they pop up every few feet when you gain a foot. I remember my days as a commuter so I cant get pissed at these people. I use to try to run past cars and people to reach the train station to catch my train. Hmm...my commuter days are one of my greatest years in my life as well. Its how I met ______ in fact. Hmm...something also happened on a train back then but I cant seem to remember. It is 7:35 A.m and I am now at Lowe's Theater just have to turn right and Ill be on the street that leads to the library. Look both ways and hmm...wow look at that black dump truck there. Jet black with a shade of yellow on the side to spell some words. I cant read the words. Aha funny my favorite two colors on this weird dump truck black and yellow. So..anyway look left. To the left I have the dump truck here and to the right just that street and just looking for pedestrians. It is 7:36 A.M and I flick the switch to turn my right signal on. Tick Tick Tick the green arrow ticks and tocks on my dashboard. I turn my wheel slowly to the right. I look fast again to my left while my Beemer is in motion. The black and yellow truck is coming up fast to me. My heart is getting faster. Maybe I should wait for this thing to pass. Im in the middle of the road though. I just cant stop. I keep on moving and hope that the driver will realize his mistake and stop. My car is still in a turn and suddenly the truck is somehow so close to me that I can see the driver inside. I cant believe my eyes. I thought I would never see HIM again. How is he here? All I know is that this thing I once knew but I dont have time to think. I have to get out of his way!. Before I have time to think of what Im going to do for a motion with my car the dump truck smashes hard into the driver side of my car. My side. I feel an intense pressure on my left like someone just took my whole side and squeezed it all together. My heart is being crushed by pounds of metal. I cant breathe. THe light of day is gone and I only see complete darkness. Im going to die. Why must I die? I dont want to leave _____. I love her too much. How could she handle it? I dont know how I can be thinking when I probably have serious injuries. I feel the pain so intense and yet I expected to lose consciousness. My sight is of blackness and I think maybe Ill be able to stay awake threw all this,maybe I will stay alive. As soon as I even begin to think this I feel like I'm rolling over and over and over and over. My head is crashing against the ceiling of the car I think. What the hell is goin on? I cant think anymore. I cant breathe. I cant breathe. I cant breathe. I cant............................"Goooood morning everyone. This is abc News in the Morning and I'm Patrick o DOnell ""And im Sara Fontaine who will give you your traffic updates. "Im Lindsey Hamilton who will be giving you your Boston weather for the day. "Aaaand I;m Johnny Repp who wull be giving you your update on who married who,who broke up with who,and who wants to break up with who on your entertainment news. THIS IS abc NEWS IN THE MORNING. "Good Morning to our viwers. Today is Tuesday March 31st 2009. Its 7:59 on this windy day wouldnt you say Sara? "Ill tell you it sure was Patrick. I almost was blown away today by the winds but thats for Lindsey to tell us right ? "Of course of course""In this mornings news, two Turkish planes bombed Kurdistan today due to PKK militants killing 10 Turkish militants outside of a customs building in the Istanbul District. "OOO doesnt sound good now does it Patrick?""Well...that may not sound good but today in Boston there will be the annual Children week. "Oh yes I was looking forward to that.""So for all those people that would like to chip in and help some children...the event will be held at the Boston South End pubic Library today at 3 p.m and should last till 7 p.m tonight and then of course same time tomorrow . There should be groups for children to play in and for adults,small workshops on how we can help our chidlren."O yes that does sound nice. For anyone thats trying to get anywhere near the Boston Library you wont have much luck. " Why is that Sara who is with the traffic who should have said that she was the traffic woman. "AHAHAH well Lindsey it's a bit shocking to find that there was an accident right across from the Boston Common nearly a half hour ago. ""Oh wow right in a public street too. ""Yes so dont try going down Winter,Summer, or Franklin ST. Besides that there was one accident on Rt. 128, there is a bit of a bulge there but there shoud be an estiamted wait time in traffic of 5 -10 minutes. Besides that the roads are clean this morning. "Yes thank you Sara. Back to the news, it seems that on the story of that accident that Sara told us there are 7 people injured,one man it is said to be believed dead and there is one person missing as well. It's a strange accident. Lets go with Rebecca Chong with more details who is live now at the scene"."Yes Patrick. The scene here is devastating. It seems at 7:36 this morning a man who is yet to be identified at the moment was in a 2009 BMW 202 X when as he was taking a turn he was struck by an incoming dumpster truck stricking his drivers side. The bmw was smashed completely on the drivers side and if you look down the street here you can see that the dump truck was actually moving the bmw along the street. No drivers were hurt but the Bmw hit a curb and spun over injuring at least 7 pedestrians. From what we know,these injured people have not serious injuries. It seems to be that these people were harmed not by the car itself but by metal pieces of the car. In fact we have here with us a man that saw the whole collision while sitting on a bench waiting for the 7:40 bus. Say your name sir.""Yeahh hi my names Bill Shawmut. I was sitting here on this bench and Im looking at this Bmw right? Im thinking to myself what would I do to get me one of those babies? One second im looking at this beaut and the next second Im seeing a huge dump truck like a big mother beep beep.""Excuse me sir?""O yeah sorry about the swearing but this thing was pretty big. Like black and yellow I aint ever even seen a truck with yellow and black maybe white and yellow but not black. Anywayss this truck smashes into the driver side of the car right? and its still moving! This truck is still pushing this Bmw along the street! Im thinking what the hell aint the driver realized he just crashed into somethin? So this truck is just plowing this car down the street and Im standing up to see down the street now. Then the bmw kind of moved away from the truck and hit the sidewalk. All I know is then I be seeing this car flip over. Then like all these pieces of the car start flyin around everywhere and im thinkin to myself s*** (beep) it better not be explodin now. Luckily it didnt. But yeah I saw the metal flyin everywhere. From my angle I could only see the car and the truck but not any people. God bless anyone involved in this accident. Might I add that this whole morning is ruined and its all to blame for one m********* (BEEP)driver on the road It was the scariest s*** (beep) I seen in my life.""Thank you Bill for that insightful account of what has happened here today. As Bill has told us the bmw is completely wrecked. We did manage to see the driver of the BMW in one quick glimpse. We'll have some footage of him later live. From what we could see he had wounds to his head. We can see from our distance the BMW did have the use of airbags. As for the truck ...it seemed to have stopped a few feet after the BMW. THres not much we can say for the truck. Its a truck so...not much damage has been done to this truck. Theres dents on the front. Theres no driver found. Witnesses say they did see people running after the accident. It is possible that this will turn out to be a case of Hit and run and if the driver of the BMW dies...well then this will soon to be called manslaughter. Back to you Patrick. Hmm....Steevey. Why does he always do that? He thinks he doesnt wake me up when he kisses me but he does! Hes such a romantic though doing that. Let me check the time. Only 6:54! Steve must have just left like a few minutes ago. I didnt even get to sleep in . Grrrr. Well im up now might as well get my s*** done. Lets see first thing is bathrooom. Didnt he say something about something in my make-up kit? Hmm..whats in there? Probably some nice book he got from the library. I never use to like to read but hes so convincing. "Just read it honey! Come on you know you wanna _____! Come on ____ everyone lets go! Come on lets get to it,You know you wanna do it!""Steve be quiet Ill read the book. ""Fine read the book and then you'll come up to me all thanking me honey. Yup thats my Steevey. The book he picked out for me was great and yeah I did give him a hug. Hes just so sweet who wouldnt want to hug him besides me? Ahaha yeah so lets see whats in the make-up kit. My make -up kit is near the sink on the shelf. Its one big shelf so definitely my stuff wont be falling down. Hmm...lets see whats in here. He left a note on the kit. _____..I know how much you wanted that special thing youve been wanting and today you can get it! Yay for you! Dont forget though dont go too crazy because Im gonna be hungry tonight so I was thinking maybe like Steak with rice or whatever you want. Either way we need to do some shopping for food. Dont forget ______ I love you =) Awww thats nice of him but whats in here. I hate it how he likes to build the suspense of things just give whatever it is to me now! I opened the box and there it was two nicely folded hundred bills and a beautiful ring next to it. O my God! When did he get this?! Its soo beautiful! Of course! Today was the day we first met ! How could I forget? Aghh mornings they make me stupid. Ill like never take this ring off. Its like at least 2 karot or 3 whatever! Its real diamond for sure! Like I cant believe it! How could he do this? I never would have guessed! Pheww ok..I have to calm down. Whats the 200 dollars for though? All on food? We're not that low I think. Lets see I know hes bad at math but we usually worry about just what to eat for tonight and go day by day, not stack up on food. So...he should know we usually use about 50 for a good meal. 150 dollars what could I do with that? He couldnt want me to get....? No way. He wouldnt be that nice to me in one day! I already have a beautiful ring on me! He wouldnt want me to get the purse! Let me see that note again. "I know how much you wanted that special thing you've been waiting for and today you can get it!" He really wants me to get the purse! I cant believe he actually listened to me always talk about it. I thought he was half asleep at the table when I always told him the special features to that purse. He would always act like he was sleeping too! I never thought....he is sooo getting that steak and rice tonight! I better hurry up, get in the shower and eat something real quick. The malls open up at like 7:30. Ok its 7:15 . I had to rush a bit and it was hard to choose which pink shirt I wanted to wear for today and the shoes too but I did it and I have still time to eat something reall fast. Lets see...Im in the kitchen and whats that on the table? A pie and chocolate? Can this day get any better for me? I love pie! How could he do this to me?! I dont have the time to eat the pie now,I could eat it in the car but then Ill get my pink floor mats messy and then I'll have crumbs! Theres chocolate too though. Um... come on choose ____! Pie or chocolate! Thats it screw the chocolate. Pie your coming with me! Let me just get a fork then me and you are out of here mr. pumpkin pie. 7:30 in the morning. I cant believe I'm awake this early and not in a grouchy mood. If it wasnt for this ring and that pie and this purse then I probably would be in a shitty mood today. I made it to the mall at 7:25. It's close to our house. I actually half finished the pie...it was soo good! I just couldnt stop eating! Well...here Iam now at Sears waiting for the teenage girl to ring me up for my nice purse. "O MY GOd your actually getting this? This is like the coolest purse ever!""Yeah I know right? So..how much will it be ? "Its going to be $148.13""I handed her the cash and I received back my change. I liked this girl . She had a good style to her. I could see she had good style and her eyelashes...those were so nice . "Did you know you have nice eyelashes?""Really? Awww thank you! Well ive been tired like s*** but that just really cheered me up thanks! " I nodded to her and left the store. It felt good to feel like a young girl. Im usually not always like this saying cool and stuff. But...I still sometimes feel like a teenage girl . Whenever I walk into a mall, Im just 16 years old again. Lately Ive just been feeling like that age since I heard of that new purse. But...I think Ill be acting my age after tomorrow. I still have to finish that essay professor grant gave me. I'm still at Northeastern going to finish my masters in Science. Soon Ill be finished this year so.. I dont know where Ill go from there, but im glad that at least im not a bum to sit around the house all day. I dont know ...maybe after this degree..I can have the thought of children. At least if kids come into my life now there would be a loving father who has a firm and high job and at least a mother with a degree that could get her a decent job if someday Steevey lost the job or took ill. Always have to think for the future. It's 7:37 as of now and Im on the way to my car. I feel sad now for some reason like I forgot something or Im missing something important though I dont know what it could be. Well..maybe its just my mind telling me get back home and finish that term paper now! Well..Im in my sweet pink BMW and ready to get back home! It is 7:50 and I'm out of my car and have my keys in the hole of the door. My cell phone rings. This would be the perfect chance to see how my purse does its magic. I press the brown button on the side of the purse,you can barely even see it it blends in so well with the purse. Instantly I know that the purse has put me threw with whoever is calling. I say "Hello?""Is this Mrs. Weattie?""Yes this is she, who is speaking ?""This is Seargent Nick Randal from the South End Boston Police Department.""O wow, I wasnt expecting a call from an officer. Um...is there a reason that your calling me so early? Did I do something wrong? "No maam no. Its not that, maam as a procedure I usually tell people that if you are standing now you may want to sit down. "For what reason, besides Im like right about to get into my house so I just cant sit on the ground."Well maam if you must you should sit on the ground. Maam..this morning at 7:35 your husband Steve was struck by a dump truck across the Lowe's Theater. It was a very serious accident. Your husbands car is completely ruined,in fact barely recognizeable. As of now, for sure we know that he is in the ER. The paramedics told us that your husband's heart had stopped twice and that they had to inject adrenaline to get his heart beating again. He has received serious head trauma and multiple bruises to his body. He is living and is not in I believe ICU, I dont know why he is not there or in an operating room but for sure we know that he is in the ER and that it would be wise if you could come down to the hospital. ""Steevey no how could Steevey...it it cant be him. It must be some one else. He was just on his way to work. He doesnt take a highway or anything! It cant be him!!! NOOO!!""Maam we are completely sure it is him. He had the id of Steve Wheatie,27 years old, resident of 245 Andalos St. Boston.""Its just....will he be all right??? "Maam I cant say for sure. I suggest you go see him at the hospital and now maam I have other matters to attend too. Good day."Good day? Good day! What the hell do you mean a good day? My husbands been in an accident and your going to tell to have a good day!You stupid cop pig!" I cant take what he just told me. How can Steevey be in the hospital? He could be dead! Steevey! WHY?! I fell to the ground and my door opened to the entrance of my house. Steve, no you cant die. How? I feel like my heart will burst how can this happen? I look up and see my house. Steevey its like hes here in front of me. Memories of him here come bac to me. Him bringing me into this house the first time with me in his arms as we walked into his house,walked on where im sitting as husband and wife. Steevey kicking our stair case there by accident when his team won the soccer match,him screaming GOOOAAAAALLLLL! Him taking a kick and slapping him his foot on the staircase and him hopping in pain still saying "OWWW,goalllll! ___I need some ice!" How can this have happened to him? "Steevey,no. Please God dont let this happen to him". 5 minutes ago seems like a whole other world. I only feel pain,fear,and love for my husband in this new world. O God,I have to go get there fast. I cant let him go. Nooo. Steevey. Tears flow down my eyes as I drive to the hospital with our memories together racing threw my head. Steve.Dont die. Dont. 8:35 in the morning. Im at the hospital and I'm speaking to Dr. Roknilajah that has seen Steevey. "How is he ? Will he live? Please tell me yes please. "Maam someone upstairs must sure like him. Hes fine.""He is! O my God! YES! I start jumping and down not caring that others are looking at me as they pass by. My husband will live ! YES! "Maam if you could please calm down for a moment.""What? Dont tell me theres some kind of other problem.""Maam,your in some way scaring the patients with your yelling for joy.""The patients dont know that my Steevey is going to live! You hear all that you patients! My husband will live! Take that!"Mrs. ____ please calm down. I have to tell you your husbands situation here.""What? Dont tell me you just made me do all that for nothing. Hes okay right?""Not per say. As of now he is sleeping as both you and I would sleep. He is not in a coma or such at all. We know that his heart stopped on the way here. Im very suspicious of this since his damages to his head are not fatal. You see maam...I was under the impression I would be receiving a patient with severe head trauma,enough that would have the brain so badly affected to stop the heart. Your husband has inguries that could be healed in less than 2 weeks. He has only a deep scratch that will be located near his eyebrow. As I said he can be healed. I can not say how he will be when he wakes up since he has not gained consciousness per say. He has spoken though so that rules out coma. He will have to stay the week for us to monitor his vital signs and see if he has been affected by this accident."But...hes still well right?""Yes he is well. We will on the safe side though monitor him. We could even discharge him tonight but its not that. Its just he almost died in the ambulance and it would be recommended that we see if some thing like that will happen again. It could have just been from shock that his heart stopped but you understand me right? "Yes, I completely understand. As long as my husband is well then im well. So.. can I see him now? ""Yes if you would just follow me this way we should be at his room in a minute or 2. So..follow me. I have to admit your husband is a lucky man to be alive.We know that the accident was very severe. The car is completely wrecked We were told plenty of times by the paramdedics. Your husband must have had worn his seat belt and probably had good German airbags. ""Ahahaha yeah. Well...I love Beemers. I had a car one time that was like a death trap when I was 16. It was soo unsafe. But..I got a car from my dad and even that wasnt safe. The beemers though are just so adorable,fast and dependable. My husband well..he just saw my car when I met him and he just fell for BMWS. We're BMW people so..its good we are if it was those airbags that helped to prevent him from hurting himself.""Bmws you say? My family hates BMWS. By the way we are almost to his room. Anyway my family,we are Desi,my father forbid any German cars. He say first they too expensive and that they are too small and are unsafe for drivers. My father tried to make my family Toyota lovers. He still has his Toyota but I went for the Honda instead. "You go for Hondas! AHAH I dont know why Im laughing,we're in a hospital,but a Honda! Their so bad! Everyone knows that! Back in teh day they were good with the accords but the new gxs and all are soo bad.! Wow, sorry I just lately have had a weird experience. I feel like im 16 again lately. Just a little stage im going threw.""Hey its no problem o we all have our stages and no offense I take for the Honda thing. I know myself Honda is bad, I want to trade for NIssan,it is much cheaper than Honda. Anyway here is your husbands room,room 613. Shall we go in?""Yes obviously!""Ok.'"Steeevey.Steevey, Steevey Weevey get up. Come on my Steevey Weevey!" I was in darkness but I could here her voice calling to me. I couldnt see but I tried to move my arm to the dark to reach her. It sounded like ____ was above me calling for me. I had to reach her . ______! _____! Im here . Im here! "Are you little man? Are you here or are you just talking to yourself? "Who...whos there?""An old friend just saying hi. I'll keep in touch." That voice in the darkness ...it sounded familiar. It was a raspy voice that sounded too old to even speak...a voice that evoked fear threw me. I felt myself shiver. Where am I? "STEEVEY! GET UP! COME ON GET UP STEEVEY! PLEASE!" I heard her voice and all fear was washed away from me. I couldnt even remember who spoke to me. All I knew was ____ back and I had to find her. I saw light in front of me. I could see it and I ran to it. I ran to her voice. I saw the light grow and grow and grow until my whole sight was filled with light. I opened my eyes to look into my loves eyes ____. She was kissing me and I kissed back. I felt like I had run a thousand miles and my reward after the struggle of running was to be with ____. "mmmm...this is a nice way to wake up,can we do more things?""Steevey! Dont ever scare me like that again! I thought that you would never wake up! I almost was going to shove water down your head! Dr. Roknilajah though said it would spoil the equipment. ""What did you say? Doctor? Where am I ____?""Steve its ok. Your in a hospital. Its like 8:45 in the morning". You had an accident this morning at 7:35. " WHAT?! I had an accident less than an hour ago?! How am I?""Calm down Steevey." She gave me a hug and rubbed my hair. I was beginning to get scared but her hug calmed me down. It was like she had a mystic power to somehow remove all all the pain and fear from me. She spoke to me in whispers like I was her child rubbing my hair threw. "Shhh. Steevey its ok. You had an accident but its ok. Your ok. You just came out of it with a scratch." Thats it a scratch?""Isnt that funny Steve? The doctor says you have the same scratch as me right near your left eyebrow except yours is going to be a a whoole lot bigger than mine. "O real nice way to cheer me up ____""Ahahah im sorry I just lately have been feeling like I'm 16 again. Its strange I even said like! I've been using like today like at least 100 times!. "____ thats fine...when do you think I fell in love with you? I fell in love with you when you were 16. If your going to be 16 then I;ll fall in love with you all over again. "Awww Steevey. You always have something sweet to say dont you? "Baaby I may be lying down here but Ill always be sweet for you and Ill keep on being sweet. I was beginnning myself to feel like I was young again. Strange. I hadnt said those kind of pick up lines since I was 16. It must just be that my mind is believing from ____ that we are 16 again. "sO... Steve. Do you feel better?" I feel great now ____ but when do I get out of here? Thats the question I want to get answered. "Steve your not allowed out of here for like a week. Ooops I said like again. I mean your not allowed to leave this hospital until a week has passed. "Oh wow. What am I going to do the whole time? ""Rest of course. Get your strength back. You'll need your energy. "Energy?""Well...did you think I would forget about this ring and this purse? I think you'll need to get your energy back because honey you and me will be busy with some fun work soon. "Oooo well dont get my heart racing for you ____ or else the doctors will think Im going crazy over here. "Ahahah well Steevey Ill be bacK in a bit to get you something to cheer you up.! "Ok ____ I cant wait to see what it is . I smiled to her and she gave me another of her gorgeous smiles. I layed my head down on the pillow more and couldnt believe that I was here in a hospital,feeling completely normal with only a scratch on my head. Im in a hospital and my BMW is probably trash now. Its funny how my life changed in less than an hour. I guess I'll be missing that childrens week at the library. I dont think they let cell phones in here so I'll have to ask ___ to call Charlie because he'll have to cvoer for me. Hes my assistant so he knows most of my plans of what I was going to say and do...well.. the boring stuff. Its the funny that he wont have or the wit but at least he;ll get my point across with everyone. I wonder what ____ will bring me. Maybe a pie. I could go for some pie right about now. Poor Steevey. He must feel like crap right now. Im so thankful that at least hes alive. He still has his sweetness going for him. He seems normal so Im so glad that at least hes all right. I think some pie,though,will cheer him up. Good thing I saved half of it. Im in the hospital's parking lot,its an elevated parking lot so I'm on the 3rd floor. I'm now in front of my pink Beemer putting my keys into the doors lock. "Dont think he likes that pie. I think he likes chocolate better." What,WHERE THE hell did that voice come from? "Who's there?""An old friend paying my regards to an old friend.""Well...ok old friend,stay the f*** away from me you hear?! You sound like a perv and I've seen movies,I'm not going to be the fool girl to keep on talking to the killer so that he can get closer to me to get me!. "Ooo feisty little girl arent you?""Well ____ dont worry you will be seeing more of me around lately. Eve heard of taking a chill pill? HAHAHAHAHA!!!!" Aghhh that laugh. This mans laugh sent goosebumps running down my spine. I started shaking a bit. It must just be the wind and its cold so...thats just a laugh. I better get in my car now...this pervert could be like right next to me! I turn the key in the lock and quickly get in my beemer. I shut the door and quickly hit the automatic lock for the doors. I put the key in the ignition. Im backing up from my parking space. I look behind me. "BOOO!""AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!!!" He's right there sitting in the seat in the back. I scream uncontrollably and run from my car. I quickly take the keys out of the ignition quickly,run out of the car like theres no tomorrow. Other people looking for parking spaces drive by me "Watch it you dumb broad!""Shove it Im friggin running here!" Whoa..why am I talking like this and what am I running for? Maybe I'm seeing things. Maybe there was no guy in the car. My door was locked when I entered so...maybe im just imagining things. I think maybe I need a quick nap. Whats happened today has made me feel like I've been awake straight for a week. I feel like a fool walking back to my car. What if there is someone in the car? What the hell am I walking back to the pervert guy? My cars just right there,I can see it. Its about 45 ft. from me. I dont see anyone in the car. I definitely think I was imagining things. A car suddenly comes around the corner. I feel safer if there was a witness around when I get near the car. If there was someone here they woudnt try s*** to try and get me. I run to my car and the driver looking for a space passes by me when I reach my Beemer. No one is in my car and my door is open still. I definitely think I just imagined that guy. What am I fooling myself? Of course I saw him. Maybe though he was behind the car outside and not inside the car. It doesnt matter. It was probably just some lonely hobo looking for some money and prob from me a piece of a**. AHAHAHAHAHAAHAH! Likes he gonna get it! I dont think so! AHAHAHAHAHAH! Ok...im so not surprised now that Im thinkinng like this and randomly laughing. I think Ill just go with the flow with what my minds doing. I've been too serious lately. Now just in case I think Ill put my Beemer in a different space. Maybe on the 1st floor. Then im soo giving Steevey his pie. Then he can have the pie to eat...and me to cheer him up! He's already had a bad day but Im going to try to make it better since he made the beginning of my day the greatest. "Phewww that tasted good." I told ____ after finishing a plate of pumpin pie in my room. "I know right? You bought like the best pie for me. Whered you get it from anyway? ""Hmm...I think I think I got it from BJ's.""You went to BJ's last night? Thats like almost all the way near Cambridge! You went all the way down there last night just for me?""Well...I was low on aftershave so I had to get that too.""Steevey, you went all the way to BJ;s just for aftershave? Couldnt you just get that from Sams club,its like a few streets away from our house! ""____ your right but then again, Bj's makes some good pie dont they? ""Awww so you did go all the way out there just for me!". "Did you think I would forget the day that we first met? It was the best day of my life. How could I forget it? It was when I met you and that was the best thing to ever happen to me. I met you ____ ,you my best friend in life,my companion""Steevey shut up. Your like going to make me cry! I understand. I'll admit that at first I thought you were just another guy from their little gang trying to suck up to me. I was thinking what a lame kid pretending like he actually wants to protect me? Could you do a better job acting ? "Ahahaha""Yeah,Steevey. Im glad I met you that day. I remember I was having a shitty day too. Its like when I started speaking to you,like everything just cleared up and I felt so happy and glad to be around with you. "Aww ____ now im going to cry. I dont have that kind of affect on you. ""Of course you do,your my Steevey." She rubs my cheek and looks at me. Her face is so sad. I know how hard it must be for her to see me in this bed,looking like I;m helpless. I see a tear come from her eye and fall down onto the bed. "___ dont. Please dont cry. I dont want you to cry. I'm ok,I'm going to get threw this for you. "No Steevey. Its not fair! How could this have happenned to us? You left for work like any other day! You left me the most beautiful gifts that no one has ever given me,you didnt do anything wrong and look whats happened to you! I cant stand to see you here. It's not you. I'm use to seeing you happy and dancing all weird and all that other stuff you do to try to make me laugh.""_____ come here." I open my arms for her and she enters into my arms. I give her a long hug and a tear falls from my eye into her hair. "I will get threw this. Dont worry ____. Ill get threw this for you. I'll take us away from this pain. Ill take the sadness and pain away from you like I did back at the station." I'll take it all away soon ______. It is 4:45 P.M March 31st,1999."Can I have your attention please? Now boarding for the 4:58 Worcester Express on traaack number 7. I repeat now boarding for the 4:58 Worcester Express on traaaaaaack number 7." Finnaly, theres my damn train. I'm 16 years old. I'm in South Station in Boston. It is 4:45 P.M. I am sitting at a table with my backpack on my shoulders,eating a Milky Way candybar. I'm sitting with hundreds of other people waiting for other trains to pull in,to Needleham,to Attleboro,to Marlborough,and for others to Florida and Washington D.C. I dont have much time to waste,since if I move slow then I will probably not get a seat for myself and I will have to sit with someone,probably a smelly lady who hasnt taken a shower in days,or maybe next to someone eating a smelly sandwhich. Either way if I want my own whole seat I should move now. The Worcester Express gets packed pretty fast. It is 4:46 P.M. I get up from my chair and walk to the closest trash bin. I look back to make sure I did not leave anything behind. My seat has in less than 20 seconds been already taken by another person. Seats in the station are hard to get in the afternoon due to packs and packs of people trying to get home from here. I turn my head back from that person who took my chair and look for the trash bin which I find is near the bookstore they have here. Not a bad book store but the prices are soo damn expensive. $21.95 is the price for one Dr. Seuss book. I'm like what the hell? How many commuters are suckers here too actually buy from this store? It seems alot are because this store is still in business. It is 4:47 P.M. Im turning away from the trash bin and walking a bit faster to the doors that leads to the track. I'm passing by the food court with passing Au Bon Pain,Mcdonalds,Som Dum Guy Chinese food,and I'm outside where the trains are waiting to be boarded. The intercom once again says "Now boarding on the 4:58 Worcester Express on traaaaaack number 7. Also now boarding on the 4:58 train to Providence on traaack number 9. Now boarding on the 4:58 train to Providence on traaack number 9. I'm walking down the train platform to chooose a car to go too. Hundreds of people are walking with me looking for a car to choose . I walk a bit down since the further cars you go too the less people there are. Everyone takes the first 3 cars and thats where its most packed. Theres some hold up a bit up front. Why is everyone kind of slowing down? Hmm...I try to see more on my tippy toes and I can see that its just a group of kids my age their in the middle of the platform. Well..they should move. Im not going to wait here on this platform all day."You know what Jack? I dont like pink. I think pink is for fags,and for girls well then you must be for girls with girls right baby? "Shut the f*** up and leave me alone. Just let me get in the damn train. "Ooo but what if we dont want too ?""Well then I'll just have to kick your a** wont I? "Oh you hear this Jack?""O yeah I be hearing this Johnny. This girl got fangs watch out.""Ahahah.. how bout this baby dolll, why dont you come with me and Jack here and we'll show you a good time around Boston. "No thanks I dont need a couple of fags to show me the gay bars around here. I dont go for fags,their not my type.""You stupid little bit.....! "Excuse me Johnny is it? Leave the girl alone." I dont know why I stepped forward. I didnt even know I had the guts to do this. But..I saw that this Johnny was gonna take a hit at this girl. I knew that if he did one hit that someone would stop him if he tried for another but I couldnt allow for even one hit to hit her precious face. I could not just go on with my business without protecting this girl. She was too beautiful. I never saw a girl as pretty as her. I felt like I had to protect her from these scumbags. I had a feeling he was going to make a move so I pushed threw the crowd,got close to Johnny and caught his hand in mid-air before he could do anything."Yo,what the hell this kid doing Jack? Let go of my damn hand you little.....""Hey I dont need to hear any swearing from your mouth. Ill let your hand go if you can leave this girl alone,good idea? "Like s*** it is"" I was soo occupied with this Johnny and me thinking I was saving the day for this girl that I forgot about Johnny's other hand and the other guy Jack. He took his other hand and punched me hard in the chest. No one saw that move because Jack moved in and got behind me and punched me in the back. I was on the ground. I was thinking what is the girl doing now? What the hell,theres a fight going on here and no one is saying anything. These people,commuters,are so fucking dumbasses! I was on the ground,in a kneeling position. "I think little boy you picked the wrong fight to play in. Why dont you come with us and we can all have a little fun, Me,Jack and this bitc..... "I told you shut the hell up! " My temper came suddenly threw the pain of being punched. I took my hand and punched Johnny behind his leg. His leg by reaction bent down and I took that oppurtunity to rise up and me be above him I took my knee and slammed it hard against his face. As for Jack he stood there in shock and so...for him I turned around and tried to give him one good punch from me. He tried to run away from me . I didnt want to let him get away without some pain so I tried to kick his leg. I did and he ran into a few commuters knocking down a 2 men. His face hit the pavement and I could see at least there was some burns there to let him feel some pain. I turned around and looked for the girl. She was stepping on the hand of Johnny. "Who's the b****? WHo?""Owww owwwww. Let me go!"" Not until you say it.!""All right All right Im the b****!""And what color do you love?""I love pink,all right owww oowwwww! damn stop! I said it! I love pink! "Thats right you better be loving pink! Pink everything got it?! "Yeah yeah let me go!""Hey anything you want to say to this guy? I was just in shock of how she was handling him,then I realized she was speaking to me. "Ooo yeah. Who loves pink Johnny? I couldnt hear you from over here.""I love pink. Im sorry, I wont say anything about you guys,just let me go! "All right get out of here then no ones stopping you!" The girl let go of his hand and he tried to get up and she kicked his butt. Literally she kicked his butt and he went falling flat on his face on the hard pavement of the platform. I was laughing and we both laughed together. We were laughing like crazy. It was just soo funny. It was something you think you would see on Madtv but this was just too funny. Johnny got up and I saw that he had a scrape on his face and a bloody nose but at least nothing serious from me giving him a knee. My knee kind of hurt but I thought that is definitely worth it to feel some pain. It means that you had a fight and kicked butt at the end. Johnny ran back down the platform running with a limp holding his butt. It was such a funny scene that me and the girl laughed at him and pointed at him. The commuters were staring at us like we were lunatics. They even turned to look at what we were pointing at. Johnny was gone but we were still pointing so I think the commuters believed we were laughing at the station. "Wow...that was soo funny.""I know right? Like did you see him run holding his a**? What a loser."I felt now a bit shy speaking to a girl I didnt even know. I was thinking to myself ok your speaking to a girl. Well come on keep on speaking. Dont just walk off now into the train and leave it at that! "Um...yeah so we make a good team kicking butt. "Ahaha yeah I guess we do. You did a good job of getting those guys. Thanks for what you did. Like I dont think anyone was even going to do anything.""Well...if you've been on the train alot then you should know that commuters are like zombies. They just walk and thats about it. They dont really have much sense and can be the biggest suckers for anything.""Ahahaahahah! Wow thats funny. So your a brave,thoughtful, funny guy. Whats your name?""I'm Steve.""Thats it,just Steve?""Yeah,just Steve. "Hmm...well since your so cute and so nice I think I'll call you Steevey! "Steevey...hmm that sounds good. Am I like your lost puppy to name me? ""You could be. Where you been all this time? I been taking this train for a week now but I havent seen you around before."""Last call boarding call for the 4:58 Worcester Express,last call for the 4:58 Worcester Express."Oh I think thats time for us to leave this place" said the girl. "Yeah I guess so. Wow look,we're like the only people on this platform now.""Yup so...Steevey shall we go in? She pointed to the train car. "Well after you maam". "Aww thank you Steevey." We entered the train together and I felt like I was in a whole new world. I've been using the commuter rail to get to school this whole year and its already the end of March and wow...theres a bit of a change in my life now meeting this beautiful girl. It is 4:58 P.m, March 31st 1999. Who is this guy? I cant believe he just saved me from those guys. I probably could have got them both but still...he actually came and stood up for me. Thats sweet...I didnt see no one else do that for me. He handled it so well too...well except for that punch at the beginning he got from that guy but I think he was too distracted looking at me. His face was like what the hell am I doing? It was soo funny. But he really saved me from those guys. Steevey...thats such a nice name. I always come up with the cool things. Hmm...Steevey. Steevey Weevy. That sounds nice. I should sit with him, see how this Steevey is. Who knows ,speaking to these commuters has been so boring,its like they have no life. Steevey,I think maybe he could entertain me for the ride like that would be so fun. Well first I want to see how he's going to handle getting me or himself a seat. I know for sure he wants to be serious with me if he sits with me,if he sits across me,then hes such a mamas boy. Ok..lets see shes right behind me and every chair is filled with people. There must be a way to get a seat. I want to sit next to her. I never even sat next to a girl before and spoke to her! Maybe I should find my own seat and just say Ill see you later then. What am I stupid? I just saved the girl and I'm just gonna let her go just like that? Shes so different from other girls. Most of the girls are all the same just trying to show their fronts and backs as much as possible. But shes not like that. I def can see her front and back but not because she wants everyone too,its just there. She seems so unique,her looks are great and she's funny too. I could definitely have fun speaking to her. It'd be I think like the first time I actually have a whole conversation with a girl and this trip is like an hour and a half so that would definitely be a long conversation. Im just too shy. I have to step up. Im so going to get me and her a seat. Just me and her. Ok what the hell is Steevey doing? Hes just standing there,looks like hes thinking. Like wow,if its going to take him this long to find a seat,I think I should find my own seat then and call it quits with him. "EXCUSE ME.""Yes son?""Sir,your sitting in my seat.""Excuse me ? I didnt see you sitting here before but if you would like too I can share this seat with you and if the girl over there is with you,I can let her fit here too. "Sir,thats a great idea. Thats very thoughtful of you but you see sir,shes my sister. She's um...come here. I lean close to the guys ear... "Shes a bit retarded,birth defect at birth.""O how tragic. "Yes sir,its hard for her to adjust to life. You see sir,today is the first time that she is on a train. Now she may not look scared,but you see I tried sitting her down in the last car with some people and she completely started screaming. If you catch me sir,I didnt want to stay in that car since I would be receiving stares and such and I dont want my sister to be stared at."O yes son. I understand. I had a grandmother who was exactly the same way. I had to watch her everyday at my home. It was hard but it feels good in the end that your helping your family doesnt it? "Yes it is sir... it will help her in the future. ""Yes,so you need the whole chair then,because she'll prob get nervous with me right? "Yes sir,howd you know? My grandmother was the same when we use to go to the groceries. God bless your soul young man.""As well as yours sir for taking care of your grandmother.""Yes,thank you and good luck with your not soo well sister. "Thank you sir." O my God! I cant keep a straight face here! Its so hard. Im not the well sister! AHAHAHA that was sooo damn funny and smart as well. Like wow,that was classy bsing. Well I think he got us seats.So...he must want to sit with me because theres one empty seat next across from the large seat. So...he definitely wants to sit with me. "After you maam.""Uhhh thank you Steevey brother hahaha". "Thank you sister." I sit down across from the girl in the single chair. I really do want to sit next to her but I want to be sweet to her first. "So..why are you sitting there? What did you get this huuuge seat for?""I got it for you. You look tired and I thought I would give you a seat for you to rest.""Aww...thats so nice. You bullshitted that guy just to get a seat just so I can get this huge seat?""Well,yeah like I said you look tired and I think maybe you should relax,put your feet up. You couldnt do that with me there. "O really? And why is that?""Well let me show you why." I got up from my seat and sat down next to her. "Put your feet up now and you;ll see why I thought you also wouldnt want me to sit there." She put her feet up and her shoes rested on me. She was wearing pink flufy boots. They looked nice. They werent even dirty from her walkin whereever. Her boots were even perfect. I didnt know what was going on here but I felt like this girl was someone special. Not just your average girl you meet and then never see again. I think this girl was someone that would be a good friend of mine for the future."Hmm..I see your point but why wouldnt you want my foot on you? You dont love my pink boots?""Of course I love your boots! Their pink and I like pink as a color. I just never thought of making it my favorite color. ""Well you should because pink is like the most best color in the world. It's like so pink! Its bright,its pink. Pink is good with everything,food,clothes,cars even,even for hair! "Ahahaha well if you say so. Before we keep on talking..um..I didnt get your name yet. "Ahahah really? I'm ____""Thats a nice name to have.""You think so or are you just saying that?""Well you tell me does this face lie? =). "Ahahaha no I dont think so but thanks for telling me that. "So your Steevey and im ____. "Yup.""So...do you mind my shoes on you? "No,no its ok. Keep them there. If your boots being there makes you feel better then leave them there. At least I get to look at your nice pink boots.""Aww, I realize that you have alot of sweet things to say. Can you always talk sweet?""Well...yeah most of the time I can talk sweet. I'll tell you now..Im a bit shy so..I never really used my sweetness with other girls. In fact your probably like the first girl that I ever really had a long conversation with. "Omg really? I feel so special now. So im the first girl to hear Steevey's sweetness!""You could say that. So...you live in Worcester?""No I live in that other little town near Worcester."" Oooo you mean Strawberry.""Yup,strawberry. How bout you? ""Im a woostarian born and raised.""Awesome, I know Worcester like the back of my hand. Where do you live around ? "Do you know Main South? I live around there.""OOoo the not so good area. So what are you doing on a train going all the way from Boston?""I go to school in Boston. The school system in Worcester sucks. "Hmm..well I go to Strawberry and it not that bad. The school is kind of gay but ehh..its ok.""Thats cool I guess.""So...what have you been going to Boston this week for? ""This week is lke the worse week to be in school for me right now so I've been skipping. "Skippping school?You actually skip school? That doesnt really help you out much at the end does it?""Are you a nerd?""What, you think im a nerd? What happened to sweet,funny,brave Steevey?""Ahahaha well...you were sticking up for school. If you went to Strawberry high then you woudldnt be talking like that.""Maybe thats true,but still you get one day to hang around but is it really worth it? A day is 24 hours but if you fail in life thats about 50 years ahead of you in failure. ""50 years of failure? I dont think I;ll be missing out on much if I skip a week. "Yeah but one week leads up to two weeks and then two weeks leads up to three weeks and then""Steevey I get it! Ok!You say I shouldnt skip school. "Welcome to the 4:58 Worcester Express. This is the 4:58 Wooorcester Express. This train will be making stops too Backbay,West Natick,Framingham,Ashland,Southborough,Westborough,Grafton,and Wooooooorcester. We hope you enjoy your trip today with the MBTA. The train will move in just a few moments so..please take your seats""So..____ how old are you?""Im 16 right now.""How about you?""Im 16 too,yay we're 16 woohoo!" An old man sitting in the seat in front of us turned in his chair to look at me and ___."Hey,kid can you quiet down?!""Kid? Im a kid. Old man would you please stay in your business and Ill stay in my business?" I told the guy. ____ was turning a light shade of pink on her cheeks and I was wondering if she knew even her body turned pink at times. "Dont try to act like a smartass all right kid? Ive had a bad day and I dont need to hear kids yelling behind me. I hear enough noise from my wife.""Your wife is noisy? Well maybe she should be! Im a woman and I think that your wife made a mistake choosing you for a husband. "Hmpphhh,just keep quiet ok?""We;ll try sir. If you could please turn around then we shall try our most bestest to be quiet ok mr adult? =) I told the guy with a big smile. "Smartas..." The man turned back to his seat."I guess we're good at dissing people too""Yeah,these people are so annoying. I hate people like that. Why cant they just mind their own business?""I dont know ___, sometimes people have their problems and they dont know where to put their feelings. I dont want to receive that guys feelings though. I have my own problems.""Yeah,this year has been hell for me. I have to work right after I get off this train. Thats like till 9 and then I have like load of h.w and I'm too lazy to do it now. "I usually do the h.w now or sleep." I told ____. "Sleeping sounds good. I'm so tired. Howd you know that I would like get tired and do this whole stretch myself out?""I kind of had a feeling thats all. It's like a sixth sense for me. I see something or an event and in my mind I just plan something out like what can follow next. I saw you and you just looked tired too me so..Im thinking we're going on a train and theres these big chairs,maybe she'll want to lay down.""Maybe that guy was right,maybe you are a smartass!""Hey ___,I'm so not. I'm just smart but that doesnt mean I'm not funny." The train suddenly makes a bulge and _____ is pushed almost out of her seat. I quickly lean myself forward and catch her around the waist. "Hahahah,I wasnt expecting that! Thanks for that too,nice reflexes.""I couldnt just let you fall on the floor with me sittting above you. I would feel feel bad that I didnt do anything. And its a dirty floor and you dont need to get yourself dirty.""Dirty? I;m a dirty girl little boy.""Your dirty? Ohh so if you hold on, let me get a tissue and wipe you off.""No,you loser I'm dirty,get it? Ok so your getting boring.""Yeah,I think I;m just tired myself,alot has happened for me for one day. Your alot of work to take care of. "I think your doing a good job at it but its ok I can handle things,it's no problem.""Yeah I know,its just my personality I guess,I just dont want a pretty girl to hurt herself,by the way this is so random but you say like alot.""Yeah no kidding. I can like say like a 100 times in a conversation. Like how was the weather today,wasnt it like great,like I wore my boots for nothing because like I thought it was going to snow in Boston today. Ahaha thats how I usually say like.""I say like but I say you know alot when I'm nervous.""I didnt hear you say you know yet so you must not be nervous yet?""I'm a chilled out guy __ nothing gets me nervous""You know what Steevey your right! I love you too much and for that I want to give you a kiss.""A KISS?! Um...why would you want to do that now? I mean,you know we just met,you know. ""Steeevey its ok I;m going to kiss you right now! "No...you know its ok,I just think you know...nows that the, you know, time to start kissing here on, a you know train!"I got you! I cant believe it. Me giving you a kiss is what would make you nervous?""Um...I never kissed anyone before.""That sucks for you Steevey. Dont worry I;m not going to kiss you,I think you need some chapstick anyway.""What? My lips arent that bad!" I touch my lips and feel that their kind of rough. "Ok,so..maybe they need some chapstick but you dont think I have good lips? "Their not pink lips like mine!""I see like actually a mix of pink and red.""No,theres only pink. You must be color blind because there is only pink.""Oooooo,yeah pink. Wait when I turn my head this way,then,yeah, you do have pink lips!""I told you I have pink lips silly Steevey.""Now arriving at BackBay. Baackbayy." It is 5:10 p.m March 31st 1999."So... I'm tellin this kid to chill out,then he takes a punch at me right at my face but he gets me in the chin!"So,I punched him in the face back...but just like a side punch but then he called me some low name like fag or something then.....""Then what,come on tell me more!""So,I lost it. I just started chasing him down the parking lot and hes screaming like a baby. I'm all get over here boy! Get over here! Then I tackled him down but the teachers saw me so I got suspended,we both got it too. Then when we were having our suspension he was telling me... "Hey,Steve man,why did you punch me for?""What a loser. He actually asked you that? "Well,I think there was a swear somewhere in that question but I cant remember in what context did he swear.""AHAHAHAH""FINAL STOP WORCESTER! FINAL STOP WORCESTER!" It is 6:38 P.m,March 31st 1999 ."Well,it looks like we're here.""Yup,so if you let my boots go Steevey.""What? Oh,yeah! Sorry." What was I doing? I realized that I had been rubbing _____'s leg,or what it looked like when I realized it massaging. I quickly took my hand away and let her feet fall to the floor by accident. "You could'nt have done that a bit easier?""Sorry,I just realized that I was massaging your leg kind of. "You didnt know you were doing that?""No,was I doing that the whole time?""Yeah,that felt good though.""I'm glad it did but I didnt even know I was doing it.""Who cares? We have to get off the train.""Yeah,lets go." I stood up from the chair and walked down the car with ____ behind me. I coudlnt believe it. I had such a great time speaking with her. We talked about everything and I'm sure we probably got alot of attention with us laughing. I cant believe that I spoke with her and I was even massaging her without realizing it? Whats going on with me? It doesnt matter. I wont see her if she goes to school. She met me because she's skipping! Crap! I should get her cell or something then to speak with her. Thats better than nothing I guess. That was great to speak with Steevey. I didnt think that he would be that fun speaking with. He's just different from other guys. He's weird but in a nice way. I cant explain it. Aghh,I'm so tired. Well,he's from here so maybe we can hang out sometime. Imagine that,we could have a friggin great time. Laughing at the people we see. I wish he was at my school. We would be getting everyone. Everyone would envy us. Hmm...so...he is right about school though. My friends are great to hang with in Boston but will they be around me 50 years from now? Maybe not. 50 years from now..phewww thats a long time from now. What if I grew up to have no friends? How would I get threw life? I wouldnt be skipping anything if I didnt have any friends. Wait! I met Steevey because I'm skipping. How will I see him again if I'm not skipping? s***! I should get his cell or something then to speak to him. Thats better then nothing I guess. "Steevey,whats you cell phone number?""____ whats your cell phone number?""JINX!""JINX!""DOUBLE JINX!,got you Steevey!""No I got you first ____ but Ill let it go""Let it go? I think your dreaming!""Whatever! I just want to know can I get your number?""Yeah of course! Do you got a number?""Yup. I dont got a cell on me now but I got one.""Ok so Steevey want to get a paper? ""Yeah let me get it out of my backpack." I drop my backback in front of her feet and bend down to look inside my backpack. While I'm looking I take a look at ____ and look at her shoes and move my sight up from her boots to her legs,from her legs to her chest,from her chest to her lips,from her lips to her eyes. From her eyes..... "Steevey,I dont have any paper! So why are you looking at me?""I thought I saw something in your eye thats all.""What was it?""I dont know""Real nice Steevey,you see something and you dont know what it is.""Ok I got the paper and a pen. So..._____ your number puh lease?""Ok so its 457-846-8610. Yours is?""Got your handy dandy cell phone ready ___?""Yeah yeah,just hurry up ,its friggin cold!""Ok,ok its 457-145-9076. ""Ok,and thats the number for Steevey. Ok all done your in my contacts. Now let me get to my damn car. Want to walk me to my car? ""You got a car?""Yeah Steevey,im 16. Dont you have a car?""Actually no. I get picked up by my mom. Shes parked probably at the front of the station. "Well...my cars in the back of the station which is where we are so... do you just want to go to your mom?"No,its ok. I always take a

JessicaL

Joined: 14 Apr 2008
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Posted: Mon Apr 14, 2008 3:05 pm Post subject: A Good story ?

i'll be honest and say that I didn't finish reading the whole thing. You writing style takes too many rabbit trails for the reader to be able to focus on the story. Keep a direct train of thought in your descriptions.One good example is a sentence towards the beginning:"I get out of our king sized Serta Bed, thats one good bed never had a bad nights sleep with that bed, and walk to the bathroom to take a shower."It just doesnt flow very well. You might take out the "thats one good bed..." insert and use it as a seperate sentence somwhere else. Your punctuation also needs to give your words definintion. The reader needs to be interested, and not skipping over every other sentence because it is irrelevant. Don't just talk, SAY something. Keep my attention. The story plot itself isn't too bad at all. I just need to hear your personality in the story. Less rambling and better sentence structure.

EmperorS

Joined: 15 Apr 2008
Posts: 18

Posted: Tue Apr 15, 2008 12:41 am Post subject: A Good story ?

Writer to writer, don't ever show the unfinished to the people, because people like different things, have different ideas, and different tastes. If you listen to people as you progress the novel or story while getting opinions from people, you'll end up changing your story so much that you end up with a collage of crap just impressed people. I understand you want opinions but write what you want - you'll always have an audience. Don't doubt yourself because, for me, the best thing about writing is the work - not the aftermath.

tote

Joined: 15 Apr 2008
Posts: 2

Posted: Tue Apr 15, 2008 10:17 am Post subject: A Good story ?

Your story bores me to sleep.Please keep what you want to say or question short and brief, so that everybody can follow without waste of time, otherwise publish your short story into a booklet.This is suppose to be a question and answer session, not writing a short story.Sorry, no offence meant.

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