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JakaPancas
Joined: 13 Jun 2007
Posts: 49
Location: Indonesia
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 Posted: Thu Nov 08, 2007 3:57 pm Post subject: Please Tell me what you think? |
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| Please be honest?I wrote this poem last night and No I am not going through this I am not sick I don't need help so please don't be all negative about it. I wrote this poem because I know that a lot of people can relate to what I wrote so please tell me what you think...GOD BLESSIs It Worth It?Is It Worth It?To want to have the perfect bodyTo want to look like that model in a magazine andTo want to make you happyIs It Worth It?To not eat even though my body is hungryTo say No when I get offered food andTo fill myself with just water so that my stomach could stop growlingI have dark circles under my eyesI feel very weak and I almost fell when I got upIs It Worth It?To put my body through thisTo look at myself in the mirror and to finally say that I look good I’m all depressedI’m sad andYes I’m hungryYes I want to stuff my mouth with food andYes I want to fill my stomach upIs It Worth It?Those jeans that once fit me tight fit me loose nowThat shirt that once showed my stomach now fits perfect andThe wedding rings that you placed on my finger that were starting to fit tight now fit me just rightIs It Worth It?Is all of this really worth it?Is it? |
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jamiejnbb
Joined: 10 Oct 2007
Posts: 54
Location: US
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| Posted: Thu Nov 08, 2007 9:57 pm Post subject: Please Tell me what you think? |
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| its ok but some of the lines are kinda blank.. |
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janicebbgurl
Joined: 05 Nov 2007
Posts: 57
Location: US
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| Posted: Fri Nov 09, 2007 3:57 am Post subject: Please Tell me what you think? |
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| NO, its not worth. The middle path is always the best. Neither extreemes are good for us.Good bless you |
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JamieFoxxII
Joined: 22 Aug 2007
Posts: 51
Location: USA
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| Posted: Fri Nov 09, 2007 9:57 am Post subject: Please Tell me what you think? |
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| Thats a truly beautiful poem. Its like the thought everyone has in the back of there head, What im doing is it worth all this?It sums up alot and sentence structure is great! |
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janicebbgurl
Joined: 05 Nov 2007
Posts: 57
Location: US
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| Posted: Fri Nov 09, 2007 3:57 pm Post subject: Please Tell me what you think? |
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| its really beautiful and i think it is nit worth it sn di need to knnow ur name casue this poem i printed it and im goimng to put by ur name i put it on ma binder its beautful and u mad eit up thats even more cool |
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jamiejnbb
Joined: 10 Oct 2007
Posts: 54
Location: US
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| Posted: Fri Nov 09, 2007 9:57 pm Post subject: Please Tell me what you think? |
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| sure it it worth everything !!!!!!!!!!ur poem is worth the best one young ladyi m collecting ur poemsgo aheadkeep it oni LOVE themkeep my collection filled !!!!!!!!!actually i like to collect poems of common friendsi really like ur poemsif there is any poem writing contest i will surely vote uhope i helped !!!!!!!!please feel free to contact me !!!!!!!! |
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