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TWBensgirl
Joined: 27 Dec 2007
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 Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 9:26 am Post subject: Needed: 2nd opinion on wording of wedding announcement? |
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| Okay, the short version - destination wedding, been planning it a long time but due to many unexpected complications, my fiance and I are now eloping instead. It almost seems like fate b/c it was what we wanted to do anyway, then changed our plans to include others, and then had to cancel our other plans. Our invitations even arrived late, so we want to change them to announcements instead. Here is the wording for our message in a bottle announcement, would love some feedback:"Far away from snow and the cold winter wind’s howl, barefoot on the beach they will be excited for what is about to follow. They knew it from the day they met that fate had played a role. They were just so right for each other, two halves destined to become one beloved soul.Beside the ocean hand in hand, casting shadows amidst the tide, he will become her loving husband and she will forever be his bride."Bride" and "Groom" joyfully announce that they will be married at a private beach ceremony... etc." |
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KellyL
Joined: 27 Dec 2007
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| Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 9:44 am Post subject: Needed: 2nd opinion on wording of wedding announcement? |
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| thats really sweet..a lot of people will like it...congrats!good luck! |
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alohagirl59
Joined: 27 Dec 2007
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| Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 10:02 am Post subject: Needed: 2nd opinion on wording of wedding announcement? |
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| I think it's nice. It sounds exactly like the kind of wedding I wanted but didn't have. Good for you for doing it *your* way! |
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iloveweddings9100
Joined: 27 Dec 2007
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| Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 10:20 am Post subject: Needed: 2nd opinion on wording of wedding announcement? |
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| Wow! That is GREAT! I love it! It must have taken some time to compose.Yes...you should go with it. And, CONGRATULATIONS on your upcoming wedding! |
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jsied96
Joined: 27 Dec 2007
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| Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 10:38 am Post subject: Needed: 2nd opinion on wording of wedding announcement? |
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| simplicity is always key in communication-Far away from snow and a winter wind's howl,barefoot on the beach, excited for what's to follow,From the day they met, fate played a role.They were right for each other, two halves to become one soul.Beside the ocean, shadows amidst the tide,he becomes her loving husband, she forever his bride. |
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52508BRIDE1024
Joined: 27 Dec 2007
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| Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 10:56 am Post subject: Needed: 2nd opinion on wording of wedding announcement? |
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| I like it, it sounds nice. |
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willimemo12
Joined: 27 Dec 2007
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| Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 11:14 am Post subject: Needed: 2nd opinion on wording of wedding announcement? |
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| I like it except for "they will be excited for what is about to follow". It is a little too wordy and could be a bit more poetic. The rest is great though. Congrats and good luck. |
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kill_yr_television5500
Joined: 27 Dec 2007
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| Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 11:32 am Post subject: Needed: 2nd opinion on wording of wedding announcement? |
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| I think that if I want bad poetry, I'll subscribe to college magazines. There is a formal format for formal announcements for a reason. Please save yourself embarrassment and use that format. I know that sounds harsh now, but in years to come when your relatives are teasing you about your cheesy wedding poem, you'll be glad you went with tradition. |
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typicalcagirl6624
Joined: 27 Dec 2007
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| Posted: Thu Dec 27, 2007 11:50 am Post subject: Needed: 2nd opinion on wording of wedding announcement? |
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| I love it! It sounds so beautiful!! It so sweet, your a wonderful writer......Do you have any more ideas like this? If so I love to see them. Very beautiful!! Best wishes on your special day!! Your off to a wonderful start! |
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