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beamsHoobima
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| It was a special day. It was on sep-3rd 1997 because, I got married.At that time, I was 18, he was 31. I first met my husband a week before our wedding day. I was so nervous but he was friendly and presented a ring to me. After that, me and my husband spoke separately and then we understood both together so i was happy.i got married in a huge hall. we had up to 300 guests in our marriage. everyone was wishing us goodluck. they were happy and enjoyed our marriage. i had a memorable gift in my marriage because, he gave a diamond necklace to me. we went to temple and then we ate our traditional delicious food .i saw my relatives and friends at that time, my husband london friends came in india our marriage.they took videos and photos. they had a good time and enjoyed our marriage.we had a photographer who was great photography take our marriage photos and videos. i did speak my husband family members who was new in my life.totally, it was a best and great day in my life |
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Jacobl
Joined: 01 Mar 2008
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| Posted: Thu Mar 13, 2008 3:33 am Post subject: please check grammar mistake in my story? |
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| ALOT of grammer mistakes in that!! |
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cujiks
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Location: USA
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| Posted: Thu Mar 13, 2008 5:11 am Post subject: please check grammar mistake in my story? |
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| sorry but there are sooo many mistakes, can't help at the moment as i am going soon. |
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David
Joined: 25 Nov 2007
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| Posted: Thu Mar 13, 2008 6:50 am Post subject: please check grammar mistake in my story? |
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| You know the answer urself!!! |
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JenniferW
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| Posted: Thu Mar 13, 2008 8:28 am Post subject: please check grammar mistake in my story? |
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| Improved:The third of September nineteen ninety seven. It was a special date in my life that will remain in my memories forever. It was so because that was the day I said those 2 simple words which meant so much: I do. At that time, I was 18. He was 31. I had never met my husband until just one week prior to the big day. I was so nervous but he was friendly and presented the ring to me. Since then, even though we spoke as separate people and views, we still understood each other completely so I was happy. The marriage took place in a massive, beautiful hall. Three hundred guests turned up, all wishing us good luck. They were excited and happy for us and enjoyed their day. I had the most memorable gift for my marriage, a breath-taking diamond necklace. We went to a magnificent temple where we ate our traditional and delicious food. I saw my relatives and friends there. My husband's London friends came here, to India, for our marriage. They took many videos and photos and had a great time. We also had an excellent photographer at the occasion who took the photos and videos. I spoke to my husband's family members who were new in my life. It truly was the most wonderful - the best day - in my life. |
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agieagieagie22
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| Posted: Thu Mar 13, 2008 10:06 am Post subject: please check grammar mistake in my story? |
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| The story is scattered. It should be told in order in which it happened. You have run on sentences. The person reading it don't really know when one thought has ended and another begins. You need to read it. Start at the beginning of your story and tell it that way. One of your sentences said my husband London friends came to india,.? Is your husband named London and some of his friends came from India. That's my point. There are hundreds of mistakes and I am sure you can correct all of them and it is a story I would love to read. The way it is, I couldn't make heads nor tails of most of it. |
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jingledelz0456
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| Posted: Thu Mar 13, 2008 11:44 am Post subject: please check grammar mistake in my story? |
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